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Would you try another book from Bryan W. Alaspa and/or Ed Altman?
Not a chance
Has Sapphire turned you off from other books in this genre?
No. The genre is amazing; it's this book that is a problem.
How did the narrator detract from the book?
He didn't exactly. I think I might be unfairly judging him simply for being willing to read this out loud.
If you could play editor, what scene or scenes would you have cut from Sapphire?
The majority of the first hundred pages could be edited, not cut. I don't need to know how many times Jimmy smiles in a single interaction with Sapphire, or that he's eating cereal for breakfast, or what he thought of when he woke up. I'm not sure why this author adds so many innocuous details. They might somehow make the author understand his fictional world better, but they don't help me as a reader. They bog down the narrative and keep the story from evolving.
Any additional comments?
I really don't like to bash other people's work because I am a writer, too, and I know it's a difficult business. That said, I can't believe how little the author trusts the reader. So many things are described and detailed that reading the words is like swimming through Jell-O. I just wanted something to happen. I didn't want to know that Jimmy was getting dressed for the prom. I didn't want a bunch of back story in the first chapter. I certainly didn't want the cliches and the countless uses of smile, turn, look, said, and other mostly meaningless words. I couldn't finish listening to this book. In the first hour, so little happened and so many bad sentences and repeated words appeared that I had to stop.