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It sounds like I'm back in high school. The word usage sounds like what my teacher would suggest, big descriptive words that don't really match the story. Even the speaker, while good, sounds like someone reading to me.
I can get past all that, but personally I like at least one character in first person. I don't feel I got to know either character.