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Hmm, how to do this without spoiling the plot . . .
Story structure is quite good, characterization needs deepening, and would expect that from a future book in the series.
Story framing and scope has some lapses. The bad guys are reported to be looking to take over the universe, not the galaxy, which kind-of made me go " whattzat - huh?". From the jist of the plot jumpdrives seem to be going from system to system, not jumping the void between galaxies. It would have been nice to be given some rough direction where in the galaxy/universe different races we are introduced to are based.
My main issue with the story thoughout was when the main character visits Earth, and alternates at odd times casually tossing out Earth-English terms and phrases when elsewhere he does not understand slang or what other terms of phrase actually mean. When he uses "ace in the hole" I completely lost my trust in the plot. It would not have been too difficult to create non-Terran turns of phrase which we, as readers could understand or work out the meaning.
I think I will pass on future books in this series. Christian, book one structure is fine, but needs some polish.