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Normally Susan Stokers books a bit like fast food, you know you shouldn't eat it...but you can't help yourself... And you enjoy it. With that said, I am a fan of Stoker, I have all her books. I respect that she is venturing into a new series that is trying for realism, but with that said, this new series has some plot holes big enough for a pickup truck to drive through. I feel that an author is creating a world for the reader, and they must make that world real within itself, but once that spell breaks the reader is pushed out from the world and starts to question it. For the first time happened to me with a Stoker book. It happened a number of times actually, to the point I was questioning the writing and plot and wasn’t able to enjoy her world at all. Plot holes, they are a many. I found myself chanting "call 911" and at several points and asking the characters to WWNDD? What would Nancy Drew do? At one plot turn they have a woman being abducted on film, and grand theft auto, but the characters come off blasé with …." Ah we called the police, they'll look for her, and with that restraining order they are taking it more seriously, but its only been an hour".... Really? No i dont think so...... What is really striking is the lack of sub characters that are in law enforcement. Not one interaction with the police in the book, and that is where some of the walls crack in the world Stoker is creating. The female lead is very unlikeable at times, and you question her reasoning. The lack of police involvement in the story was attempted to be plugged with a single line..."the next week we worked with the FBI & police". And it’s an afterthought to the story, and it screams it. Another area that walls cracked in the world were a hotel room scene, where the police should have been called, if anything to say someone was found…. But no…. and it just isn’t believable as its written right now. Spoiler alert: Within the last chapters of the book, is a prison visitors scene, the female character makes an announcement about being pregnant with Male twins early in her pregnancy. The way she makes this farfetched announcement, makes her so unlikeable. That she has had doctor’s appointments without telling the father, then drops the bomb on him to smite her mother? And lets be clear, you cannot detect the gender that early in a pregnancy, determine two heartbeats? Sometimes, it just depends… but the walls of the world cracked more. And it left me wanting to research if sperm can be a factor in twins…. The book has promise, but needs rewrites for a more believable security firm plot who interacts with law enforcement, knowing that evidence needs to be collected and a case built. Without that, you ask the characters to WWNDD, especially since Stoker is departing from her “Tech super world” where her characters can make one call and get what they need.
What I’m amazed by is that none of the beta readers pointed these things out, it’s so unlike Stoker to have a world that doesn’t hold up.
So, 3 stars because I like Stoker, and I know she can do better. And hopefully this review might be viewed by her team and I hope I offered some constructive suggestions. It isn’t my aim to be mean, just honest.
10 of 11 people found this review helpful
This book was such a refreshing read. It had serious topics, but it wasn't the average love story, in the way of I want him, I don't want him, I want him, I don't want him type. I love how grace was very sure of what she wanted and what she didn't want, I love the fact that she didn't go willingly with her father. The amazing part was how protective all of the brothers and her friends were of her and her efforts to get away from her parents. Can't wait until the next book.
2 of 2 people found this review helpful
I enjoyed the beginning of this series and will certainly be buying the rest. Ticked all the right boxes.
I loved this title, its a good read and or listen. You quickly become attached to the characters. Looking forward to the next😊
I'm a huge fan of anything by Susan Stoker and I wasn't disappointed with the first book in this series.
If I have to pick at one tiny thing to critique it would be having only one person narrate the book. It sounds a little weird having a woman's voice narrate a man's part. It wouldn't stop me ordering more audiobooks but maybe something for the authors to think about.
1 of 1 people found this review helpful
story was ok bit of an out there plot but it worked. not keen on the narrator.