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The only positive critique is that publishing this book may help other writers—hopefully much better—to feel empowered to pursue their dream of writing too. This book is proof that anyone, with any level of writing, can publish a book and even an audiobook version. Buyers beware.
Frank becomes Fran. "Fran" equates being feminine with being vulnerable and sees being vulnerable as a good thing. I'm a woman and have never liked or enjoyed being vulnerable as a result of being a female. WTH? Though it's not me, I get how some females and some males enjoy females feeling small. But I don't equate that with also feeling vulnerable. Maybe it's just me.
Continuing on their attempt to change the image of the frat, there's a frat member smoking a cigar as proof of classing up the place, their frat. Really?! A cigar as a sign of class?! Later they drank martinis on the rocks. This author seems especially young and not in a good way. There are signs of someone who hasn't seen the world, isn't familiar with the world beyond stereotypes. How many college students, frat members, no less, chill with cigars (unloaded, regular cigars) and martinis in their frat house?
Other problems with the writing is exemplified in this gem: "I wasn't tired even though I was, if you know what I mean. I was too excited about my new life…I was tired even though I wouldn't sleep this way." Okay. Is Fran tired or not? Seriously elementary writing. The author also used juvenile names for body parts (e.g. rod and globes, girl parts) which, in erotica, seriously doesn't work. They were in college, not 12. And Fran is presented has having very little worry about being found out when among strangers in a club. Her low level of fear was especially unrealistic. While in the club, we are to believe that a young male (Josh) had no hesitation in making loud sex noises and hip movements while getting a handjob from Fran. Who is this uninformed author? I'm ok with leaving some reality outside a story, especially for sex appeal. But there's a level of realism that should always be there.
Then there's the narrator. The narrator needs a lot of help making sex noises as a male. And she needs to cease growling when a male as her attempt to have some type of throaty undercurrent. It's hard to explain, but it's horrible.
I couldn't make it through the story. Life's too short to give any more time to this.
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